Aye I agree with Meli. You have showed how the same thing can have two sides and its effect depends on who uses it. So I just can add that words have power too and I believe the power that It is worth showing or expressing is the one that It is capable of achieving change. I really liked it.
Aye, reading your poem was like a long journey. It was like the endless journey of al lifetime of someone who struggles to go from the dungeons of shadows, all the way into the realm of light. Kneeling in dispair and deceit at the first three lines, but standing up and holding the ground in hope and warmth in the final three. I think you made a perfect use of similies and a better one of metaphors. I really enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing! =)
I totally agree with everybody. Aye, I love the way you described power, your similes are so strong that made me feel a great sense of energy for a moment.
Aye, I like a lot your poem. I love the comparisons you use and as Caro said, it made me feel a beautiful sense of energy while I was reading. I don’t know why but the last part when you say: “like the freedom we feel when we have no more fear” reminds me all the seasons of “Las chicas del cable” when they fight for a better world and leave all fears behind. The image is great! I like a lot.
Power! what a word you've chosen to describe. Aye, you've made the reader part of your poem when you decided to use we instead of any other pronoun in the last line and that's great because it is impossible for us not to feel identified with the words you've chosen. You've given the reader an active role. Then it's up to us to feel that power or not. Well done!!!
Aye I loved how you showed both the positive and negative side of the same thing. I like the comparisons you chose and I think they are very powerful!
ResponderEliminarAye I agree with Meli. You have showed how the same thing can have two sides and its effect depends on who uses it. So I just can add that words have power too and I believe the power that It is worth showing or expressing is the one that It is capable of achieving change. I really liked it.
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EliminarAye, I like the way you depicted such strong word. Your comparisons were so distinct! All the lines are full pf profound meanings. Love it!
ResponderEliminarAye,
ResponderEliminarreading your poem was like a long journey. It was like the endless journey of al lifetime of someone who struggles to go from the dungeons of shadows, all the way into the realm of light. Kneeling in dispair and deceit at the first three lines, but standing up and holding the ground in hope and warmth in the final three. I think you made a perfect use of similies and a better one of metaphors. I really enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing! =)
I totally agree with everybody. Aye, I love the way you described power, your similes are so strong that made me feel a great sense of energy for a moment.
ResponderEliminarAye, I like a lot your poem. I love the comparisons you use and as Caro said, it made me feel a beautiful sense of energy while I was reading. I don’t know why but the last part when you say: “like the freedom we feel when we have no more fear” reminds me all the seasons of “Las chicas del cable” when they fight for a better world and leave all fears behind. The image is great! I like a lot.
ResponderEliminar* I like your poem a lot .. / the comparisons you've used ../ reminds me of .. / I like it a lot.
EliminarPower! what a word you've chosen to describe. Aye, you've made the reader part of your poem when you decided to use we instead of any other pronoun in the last line and that's great because it is impossible for us not to feel identified with the words you've chosen. You've given the reader an active role. Then it's up to us to feel that power or not. Well done!!!
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