I enjoyed reading your poem, 'cause it depicts your innerself just as you are. May be we choose our own cage, our own fate without reaching out for a break of light, a mere slot through the wall to see if there's someone trying to reach through the crack to break the silence, to ease the pain. I liked the way you played with anadiplosis and tautotes. I loved the imagery giving life to the metaphore in the scarlet flamed hell. Very much like that of my own. <3
Marce, a beautiful poem indeed! It's really interesting how you developed the idea of loneliness till reach the climax of "your own hell", very profound, as meli said.
Marcela, I think you wrote this poem from the bottom of your heart! I like it!
ResponderEliminarI enjoyed reading your poem, 'cause it depicts your innerself just as you are. May be we choose our own cage, our own fate without reaching out for a break of light, a mere slot through the wall to see if there's someone trying to reach through the crack to break the silence, to ease the pain.
ResponderEliminarI liked the way you played with anadiplosis and tautotes. I loved the imagery giving life to the metaphore in the scarlet flamed hell. Very much like that of my own. <3
Marce, beautiful poem! I liked how you compared loneliness with a burning hell, it's really deep.
ResponderEliminarMarce, a beautiful poem indeed! It's really interesting how you developed the idea of loneliness till reach the climax of "your own hell", very profound, as meli said.
ResponderEliminarMarce, I like the way you symbolised loneliness, your poem is very deep and moving.
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